I was tasked with discussing NICE’s accomplishments for the Bridgestone Americas grant application. The grant application as a whole is separated into fields designed to examine NICE’s different sectors and motivations for applying. Bridgestone Americas primarily focuses on funding local non-profit organizations that concern education and youth development. These factors make NICE a very worthy candidate for their particular grant, which we attempted to convey accurately and astutely in crafting our grant application.
I opened my section with a narrative discussing the background information found on NICE’s website’s “About” section, and some information regarding their mission. I followed with statistics from their 2014 annual report that detail the services that the organization provided to the refugees. My section concluded with two final statements that I feel concisely state NICE’s need and the benefit that will come from funding the organization.
I did my very best to make this section as concise as possible. To date it has seen roughly a dozen revisions from the original draft. I found great inspiration and guidance in the range of feedback I received. Reading comments from my instructor, my peers, and Kathy herself offered a more universal perspective for revision and ensured that no mistakes were left unnoticed. I also appreciate Cindy for advising us to be concise in our grant writing when necessary. I used the feedback I received to make my section more objective and concise by eliminating as many unnecessary “is” verbs and prepositions by applying the paramedic method to each sentence. Further, I applied the appropriate formatting to the data section to make it more aesthetically pleasing. I also appreciated Sean’s comment that the final paragraph be moved to the top, which encouraged me to merge it with the introductory paragraph.
I believe the final draft of the accomplishment section provides a comprehensive description of NICE’s mission and a concise snapshot of how that mission is applied through various refugee programs. I am very confident in the length of my section, as it provides appropriate information and context while sparing the reader of clutter and melodrama. I am very proud of my work and have experienced substantial growth as a professional writer in crafting it. I also did my best to review the grant application as a whole to ensure that the material was unified in its style, approach, and quality. This process involved restructuring and applying the paramedic method to the majority of the application’s "Objectives" section, which is a lot more effective as a result. I hope that my work and the heavy consideration regarding audience and genre are evident in the accomplishments section, as well as the rest of the piece.